In ancient days,
my love of you
lurched formlessly
among the wilds
in search of you
to feel about
in search of me
to feel inside.
Down all those days
without a form,
my love of you
grew mad and strange.
'Til we were born,
and it found me.
And I found you,
and we were changed.
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Originally broken out as:
"origin"
in ancient days
my love for you
lurched formlessly
among the wilds
in search of you - to feel about
in search of me - to feel inside
down all those days
without a form,
my love for you
grew mad and strange
'til we were born
and it found me
and I found you
and we were changed.
Changed May 18 to this:
In ancient days, my love of you
lurched formlessly among the wilds
in search of you
- to feel about
in search of me
- to feel inside
down all those days without a form,
my love for you grew mad and strange.
'Til we were born,
and it found me,
and I found you,
and we were changed.
And now reverting much to the original form.
Annnnnd, had to switch the "of" and "for" ("love of you"; "love for you"):
In ancient days,
my love for you
lurched formlessly
among the wilds
in search of you - to feel about
in search of me - to feel inside
down all those days
without a form,
my love of you
grew mad and strange.
'Til we were born,
and it found me,
and I found you,
and we were changed.
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You know what, fuck it. BOTH should be "of." Implementing.
Nope, first "for," second "of."
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