Monday, October 23, 2006

origin

In ancient days,
my love of you
lurched formlessly
among the wilds
in search of you
to feel about
in search of me
to feel inside.
Down all those days
without a form,
my love of you
grew mad and strange.
'Til we were born,
and it found me.
And I found you,
and we were changed.
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4 comments:

  1. dogimoMay 18, 2018 at 3:40 PM

    Originally broken out as:

    "origin"

    in ancient days
    my love for you
    lurched formlessly
    among the wilds
    in search of you - to feel about
    in search of me - to feel inside
    down all those days
    without a form,
    my love for you
    grew mad and strange
    'til we were born
    and it found me
    and I found you
    and we were changed.

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  2. dogimoJune 13, 2018 at 8:59 PM

    Changed May 18 to this:

    In ancient days, my love of you
    lurched formlessly among the wilds
    in search of you
    - to feel about
    in search of me
    - to feel inside

    down all those days without a form,
    my love for you grew mad and strange.
    'Til we were born,
    and it found me,
    and I found you,

    and we were changed.

    And now reverting much to the original form.

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  3. dogimoDecember 13, 2018 at 11:02 PM

    Annnnnd, had to switch the "of" and "for" ("love of you"; "love for you"):

    In ancient days,
    my love for you
    lurched formlessly
    among the wilds
    in search of you - to feel about
    in search of me - to feel inside
    down all those days
    without a form,
    my love of you
    grew mad and strange.
    'Til we were born,
    and it found me,
    and I found you,
    and we were changed.


    ____


    You know what, fuck it. BOTH should be "of." Implementing.

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  4. dogimoDecember 13, 2018 at 11:04 PM

    Nope, first "for," second "of."

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